Just from a style point of view, and to make easier reading, I would suggest just referencing after the quote as you have done a couple of times here. For example, where you have written, 'As O’Neill (2010) writes “Featuring sets that revel in artifice, painted backdrops and scenery with off-kilter lines and skewed perspectives, Caligari tells the tale of the eponymous doctor and his somnambulist sidekick, Cesare (Conrad Veidt)” would read better just , 'As O'Neill writes, "Featuring sets...." (O'Neill, 2010). It just flows a bit better... You should put a little caption beside the images, rather than just the reference...for example, you say that figure 7 relates to the soldiers and the war, but it wasn't clear to me what the link was... Don't worry about making amendments to this review, just take the advice forward for the next one - looking forward to reading it!
A thoughtful first review, Emily - well done :)
ReplyDeleteJust from a style point of view, and to make easier reading, I would suggest just referencing after the quote as you have done a couple of times here. For example, where you have written, 'As O’Neill (2010) writes “Featuring sets that revel in artifice, painted backdrops and scenery with off-kilter lines and skewed perspectives, Caligari tells the tale of the eponymous doctor and his somnambulist sidekick, Cesare (Conrad Veidt)” would read better just , 'As O'Neill writes, "Featuring sets...." (O'Neill, 2010). It just flows a bit better...
You should put a little caption beside the images, rather than just the reference...for example, you say that figure 7 relates to the soldiers and the war, but it wasn't clear to me what the link was...
Don't worry about making amendments to this review, just take the advice forward for the next one - looking forward to reading it!